GROWING

photo- goodtoknow.co.uk
Mommy, I am growing
It shows it on the wall
Daddy, I am growing
I’m growing big and tall
I’m one inch higher than
Last measured pencil line
Look, I’m truly growing
I’m growing fit and fine
My sneakers are tight
And so are my clothes
One thing not growing
Seems to be my nose
But my freckles look bigger
Sprinkled all over the place
If I had an eraser
I could wipe them off my face
Spots and all I’m growing
I’m rising through the airs
When I get much taller
We’ll measure me upstairs!
You have the seeds for a picture book here, or maybe a magazine poem.A great universal experience!
Growing
Through a rotting
tangle of last year’s
pale blades,
new shoots
struggle up
toward the light,
young and hopeful
they tinge
fallow fields
an incomparable
green.
Thanks for that Linda. On your advice, I’ll work it for this month’s PB.
I can easily picture the fields springing to life; it’s happening in all the fields around where I live! :0)
Another great poem, Donna! Perhaps you should think about publishing a book of children’s poems! 🙂
Here’s the link to my post today: http://wp.me/p1UhOl-Nn
Thanks Carlie; that’s not a bad idea, but I’d have to get much better first. :0)
Correct me if I’m wrong, but these are freshly written, pretty much off the top of your head, right? So you’re already quite good! But poetry, like everything else, has to go through that whole editing thing…
I agree – a collection of (illustrated?) children’s poetry should possibly worm itself into your plans!
Yep, they’re all off the top of my head, and yes, they’ve got to go through editing ad nauseum, especially with rhyme…to be ‘perfect.’ Yet, it won’t stop today’s comments from making me a bit me giddy anyway! Thanks Aria! :0)
Well if you’d like to avoid the ad nauseum part, I know a good editor who helps with poetry in special cases 😉 But definitely embrace the giddiness! 🙂
I would appreciate the chance to have an editor look at my poetry. I’m having trouble grasping meter, stressed/unstressed syllables, and the concept’s tough to put into practice by research alone.
Sometimes (silly as it sounds) problems of meter are seriously helped by walking as you read the poetry aloud – when the meter is off, you’ll hear it and/or stumble in your step. Or if you’re musical, you can try a metronome?
Ooh, I’ll try it. I’m laughing as I type because I can see myself falling all over the place! :0) Do you mean step with each syllable?